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The Lies so dear... by ~kingscandlestick:iconkingscandlestick:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Fixed


All my lies are filthy rags,
And I feel so naked without them.
I hold on close & cling on tight,
As if I could hide my shame.

But I can't cover it cuz it covers me,
And I'd do anything so that they wouldn't see,
How the lies become me;
A second skin.

I can't throw it away cuz then they'd know:
What I've been wearing beneath it all.
I've counted the cost & I can't pay;
The truth is an expensive brand.

So I sully my suits & designer jeans,
Atop this patchwork of false means,
But still I can't feel clean,
No matter how hard I try.

And I wish I could,
Stand bare long enough to change;
To burn the rags & confess the lies.
I wish I could feel clean.

But it's too much to pay.
I'm saving up for another day.
For now, my tears will wash the dirt away.
Another lie that they can't see.
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Author's Comments

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~Written for a friend from his perspective~
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Written December 18th, 2005

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Mood: Love ~BumbleBeeGirl Aug 22, 2007, 1:33:48 AM
I absolutly love this, the rythm really drags you in and catches you off guard. It seems to flow and bend, and you can just imagine the words pouring like wine out of the authors lips. Its beautiful and elegant ,quite the feat.

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My CrAzY sIdE iS mY tWiN
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Mood: Love ~kingscandlestick Aug 22, 2007, 10:00:17 PM
((Tried to respond to this last night but my comment got eaten))

Whoa... I've never had a compliment like that before.... Is it possible to fav a comment? ^___^

Thank you... that's got to be the most kick ass compliment I have ever recieved on my poetry, aside from the times my writing has made peaple cry.

"The words pouring like wine out of the authors lips."

I truly do love that part... when I first did this post last night I talked about it for a bit and mentioned how it had given me an idea to go back and revisit an old poetic concept I had attempted once, but never completed. That was yesterday though...

Today it is my pleasure to tell you, it worked! I used that sentance of yours as the cornerstone for the poem, with the rest of my concept fleshing it out. The feel and flow of the poem really can be summed up in that one sentance, it was the missing piece that enabled me to finish a poem that I thought would forever remain uncompleted.

I'll be able to post it sometime tomorrow, and I'll credit and link you for that gem of inspiration you gave me. ^__^

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And again to their dreams,
With their Castles and Queens...
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~BumbleBeeGirl Aug 22, 2007, 10:15:40 PM
*huge smile*thats incredible, I am so happy for you.
You inspired me to write poetry again, somthing that I thought I'd lost many years ago... so thank you . and this happens to be the most kick ass reply I've ever gotten so a double thank you.

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My CrAzY sIdE iS mY tWiN
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Mood: Joy ~kingscandlestick Aug 22, 2007, 11:04:18 PM
Actually, I managed to get ahold of both the poem and a computer before I went to bed tonight, so you will be able to find it someplace in my gallery.

I'll save anything else I would say for the authors comment box.

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And again to their dreams,
With their Castles and Queens...
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